4/26/11 class writing

In my opinion banning soda purchases with foood stamps would effect the majority of americans and people who depend on food stamps to be able to eat everyday. Knowing that most people can't afford any othe rhealthier drinks soda is the only thing that's resonable. If they band food stamps then most citizens would have to spend moer money on buying other drinks whic h are more expensive. I agree with Julie Guthman when she says that before thinking about banning the food stamps think about banning the high fructose corn syrup and unhealthy ingredients in the food......

Response to Chp.2 "Fats Food Nation" and "Super Size Me"

In the book "Fast Food Nation" chapter 2 it explains the origin in which McDonalds came from. It mentions

the Ray A. Koc museum which was named after the man who founded the McDonalds corporation. It gives

the history and the journey that Mcdonalds made to become what it is today. In the movie "Super Size Me" it

makes similiar points. The man who did the 30 day challenge I think put his life at a huge risk just to prove a

point. I dont think I would ever have the guts to do the same but I appreciate the fact that he did it anyway

and it gave me a better view of what mcDonalds can do to you and how it effects you're body. Even me

personally Ive restrained myself from in-taking unhealthy foods and even mcDonalds and i have felt much

better physically and mentally. Sometimes i wonder if McDonalds resurant was to shut down or was never

establsihed what would america do?....

          Maybe people would see it as a good thing because there's no secret of what the food industry is

doing. In my opinion i think the movie and book were great warnings to american citizens but still no matter

how much things are said, articles are printed and movies are made about this topic most likely nothing is

bound to change.

Self-Analysis

1) The first paragraph introduces the paper"s topic very clearly.it syas what's going to be further explained in the paper and the conclusion comments quite well. The first sentence is highly relevent to the topic because it mentions the correct time period and has a happy beginning.

2) I feel that the thesis is rather strong and gives a good introduction.

3) I can identify organization of each topic. The main concepts are basicallly comparing and contrasting two time periods. Some more points can be made other than what"s written and the writer can elaborate more on some of the ingredients.

4) Not much mistakes with grammar. Everything was explained formally and no arkward sentneces.

5) Sources are well identified and in proper text.

6) The strenghts of this writer in this essay is that very strong points were made each topic was very detailed and relevant to everyhing else in the essay. Vocabulary could use some more improvement.