1) The first paragraph introduces the paper"s topic very clearly.it syas what's going to be further explained in the paper and the conclusion comments quite well. The first sentence is highly relevent to the topic because it mentions the correct time period and has a happy beginning.
2) I feel that the thesis is rather strong and gives a good introduction.
3) I can identify organization of each topic. The main concepts are basicallly comparing and contrasting two time periods. Some more points can be made other than what"s written and the writer can elaborate more on some of the ingredients.
4) Not much mistakes with grammar. Everything was explained formally and no arkward sentneces.
5) Sources are well identified and in proper text.
6) The strenghts of this writer in this essay is that very strong points were made each topic was very detailed and relevant to everyhing else in the essay. Vocabulary could use some more improvement.
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